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FSSJ vs. LCSSJ Gohan

on 4/21/2017, 7:04 pm


FAILED SSJ GOHAN
LOW-CLASS SSJ GOHAN

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Re: FSSJ vs. LCSSJ Gohan

on 4/22/2017, 12:01 am
Failed SSJ? Low-class SSJ? What are there transformations??? lmao

Uhh the battle was pretty decent. the text was moving pretty quick and the dialogue didn't really flow too well. It was kinda like

"blah I must be super saiyan AHHHH"
"OMG I DIDZ IT. IT KINDA SUCKS THO"
"no duh cuz you didn't do it."
"wtf you look like me, who you iz"
"bitch I'm you but for some reason I got the ssj power you don't have"
"I exist cuz you suck and can't transform"
"fuck you lets fight"
"ok"

It really was all over the place lmao

Put keep it up dude, you'll get better. I think you're trying to hard to make a super epic awesome fight. Try focusing on telling a cohesive set of interactions (basically a story) instead of just doing fight. I do like that you gave them a reason to fight tho even tho it wasn't really understandable
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Re: FSSJ vs. LCSSJ Gohan

on 4/22/2017, 8:51 am
1. It's DBZ so I tried to make the dialogue as bullshit as possible XD

2. I thought it went at a decent speed

3. They are fan transformations (Read the desc)

4. Okie Ill try making the plot/dialogue better, but I couldnt wait to animate the fight x3
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